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Joined: Jun 2008 Gender: Male  Posts: 108 Karma: 0 |  | Thread Lengths « Thread Started on Dec 30, 2008, 2:35am » | |
Hi everyone, this is a notice to everyone who role plays on here. Over the past couple of months this site hasn't been active, but now we are starting to rebuild it's activity which is a good sign. I would really like it if people could step up on their thread lengths as well as their activeness.
Please may you all post at least 2 paragraphs. It makes it easier for people to read and to respond back with a post of about the same length.
Example
It was a lovely warm day; the sun was shinning in the sky, as bright as ever. Edmund Pevensie or should I say King Edmund, the Just? He hadn’t seen his siblings for a long time; his life had been full of training, training for battle that was just around the corner. Edmund galloped through the forest, his horse Moon was galloping along, his hooves hitting the soft ground in a rhythm, animals and birds hurried out of the way of the on coming King as he went, so talking to him as they ran with him, Edmund laughed, galloping on.
The wind blew through his hair as he found himself in familiar territory; the trees looked the same as they had done all those moons ago when the children had first entered Narnia. He saw a figure sitting on the ground, sitting in front of the lamppost that seemed to always be there and never go away; well it wouldn’t because it was a lamppost…duh.
He trotted over to the figure, seeing the hair, seeing the face, he recognised her as Akira, she didn’t look happy, he hadn’t seen her in ages, what was she doing here all alone? ”Akira.” he said softly, jumping off Moon and letting him go to eat grass, stepping carefully so to not trip over his cloak and to not startle her.
”You alright?” he asked.
This is slightly longer than what I said above but as you can see I use descriptive writing, and mention the past in my posts.
Please may you all try your hardest in doing this, I'm sure you all can!
-Edmund
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Joined: Jun 2008 Gender: Male  Posts: 108 Karma: 0 |  | Re: Thread Lengths « Reply #1 on Dec 30, 2008, 2:38am » | |
Also before I forget please use capital letters for names, beginning of sentances etc, and spacing between ends of words and beginnings.
Example
The castle was named Cair Paravel. The Kings and Queens of Narnia lived there, their names were King Peter, King Edmund, Queen Susan and Queen Lucy, they defeated the White Witch of Narnia...
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Joined: Jun 2008 Gender: Male  Posts: 56 Karma: 0 |  | Re: Thread Lengths « Reply #2 on Dec 30, 2008, 11:40pm » | |
((Oh this is what you ment by the post lengths Ed. xD))
Also another thing spaces after every sentence is also great for your post lengths and it'll be easier for us to read. I'm not point at anyone (and I mean it this time) but it's just for us to read it.
I'm going to use Ed's exampe and make it what you're not suppose to do.
BAD EXAMPLE:
It was a lovely warm day;the sun was shinning in the sky, as bright as ever.Edmund Pevensie or should I say King Edmund, the Just?He hadn’t seen his siblings for a long time;his life had been full of training, training for battle that was just around the corner.Edmund galloped through the forest, his horse Moon was galloping along, his hooves hitting the soft ground in a rhythm, animals and birds hurried out of the way of the on coming King as he went, so talking to him as they ran with him, Edmund laughed, galloping on.
The wind blew through his hair as he found himself in familiar territory;the trees looked the same as they had done all those moons ago when the children had first entered Narnia.He saw a figure sitting on the ground, sitting in front of the lamppost that seemed to always be there and never go away;well it wouldn’t because it was a lamppost…duh.
He trotted over to the figure, seeing the hair, seeing the face, he recognised her as Akira, she didn’t look happy, he hadn’t seen her in ages, what was she doing here all alone?”Akira.”he said softly, jumping off Moon and letting him go to eat grass, stepping carefully so to not trip over his cloak and to not startle her.
”You alright?”he asked.
Good Example:
It was a lovely warm day; the sun was shinning in the sky, as bright as ever. Edmund Pevensie or should I say King Edmund, the Just? He hadn’t seen his siblings for a long time; his life had been full of training, training for battle that was just around the corner.
Edmund galloped through the forest, his horse Moon was galloping along, his hooves hitting the soft ground in a rhythm, animals and birds hurried out of the way of the on coming King as he went, so talking to him as they ran with him, Edmund laughed, galloping on.
The wind blew through his hair as he found himself in familiar territory; the trees looked the same as they had done all those moons ago when the children had first entered Narnia. He saw a figure sitting on the ground, sitting in front of the lamppost that seemed to always be there and never go away; well it wouldn’t because it was a lamppost…duh.
He trotted over to the figure, seeing the hair, seeing the face, he recognised her as Akira, she didn’t look happy, he hadn’t seen her in ages, what was she doing here all alone? ”Akira.” he said softly, jumping off Moon and letting him go to eat grass, stepping carefully so to not trip over his cloak and to not startle her.
”You alright?” he asked.
It's OK if you accidently forget that on a sentence but just to remind you that good grammer is always great.
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